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"They Called Me Trash—Watch Me Break Them All"
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"They hit me again."
"I felt the heel sink into my ribs, heard a wet crack, and tasted dust."
"Why are you doing this to me?" I spat, voice small and sharp.
"Because you are the third daughter," Deborah Bass said with a grin that had killed more than smiles. "Because the house likes clean work."
"They laughed," I told the empty courtyard. "They kicked me and called me trash. They took my food, my clothes, my name."
"Stop whining," a tinny voice cut inside my head. "Binding complete. Hello, host."
"Who—" I sat up, blood and spit hot on my lips. "Who are you?"
"I am a support unit," the voice said. "I am a system. I will give you tasks. Complete them, and you will get stronger. Fail, and you will die."
"You're a joke," I said. I reached mentally to tear it out. I could feel an odd white mote inside my skull, soft and warm, pulsing like a tiny light. I could not pull it free.
"Ten seconds to decide," the system said, like a courtroom clock. "Task one: take thirty seconds of beating. Reward: Constitution +1, a Wash-Marrows Pill."
My hands moved on their own. I grabbed the closest foot and threw the man who had been kicking me into a square lantern. People screamed. Deborah Bass's face went pale for a second and then red with anger.
"Don't!" she begged. "Third miss—"
"Half an hour," I said, voice flat. "I will take it. Then you will leave."
They hesitated. They had met a person who had been a thing to crush and found the thing was a fist. They backed off and left, dragging whispers and shame behind them.
"Congratulations, host. Task done. Constitution +1. Wash-Marrows Pill issued."
I sat on the floorboard and stared at the white grain of the pill. The system's voice was cheerful. "More tasks, more growth. We were made for each other."
"You think I am going to trust you?" I asked out loud to the silence.
"Do you want to stay dead?" it said.
"I don't."
I swallowed the pill. Heat spread like slow fire. My ribs stopped throbbing so loud. The world tasted sharper.
"I am Sophia Crawford," I told myself. The name felt foreign and right. "I am the third daughter. And I will not die like the book says."
"You read the book?" the system asked.
"No. I was in a different life. I remember rain, a temple, a master. I remember lightning. I remember falling."
"Then use that. We have work."
They tried to lock me in the house the next night. Deborah Bass led the mob, red with loyalty and hatred. They wanted my shame to be permanent. They pushed and poked and the words came like knives.
"She stole food," one accused. "She is a mockery of our family."
"I am not a mockery," I said. "I am hungry."
They plunged in with knives and curses. I rolled, I grabbed, and I found that my hands did not shake. A knife snagged the floor. I put the butt of a carved spoon into a man's ribs and threw him twelve feet into the storage chest. The others froze.
"You all want money?" I said. "I will take it. Two mid-grade spirit stones each and leave my room alone."
They spat on me and counted stones on my floor. These were the same men who had struck me an hour ago; now they left whispering that they had been paid to go.
"Task cleared," the system cooed. "Constitution +1. Circulation increase. Shop unlocked."
Shop. I tasted the word like a sweet. A chance.
I ran that night. I grabbed a satchel, a single spare dress, and slipped into the moon-lit road. The city drew its breath and looked away as I ran toward the black teeth of the Endless Wood. I had no spirit for protection, only a body aching to be rebuilt and a system that offered ladders.
The forest was a lie for strangers. The old stories said it ate souls. For me it was a shelter. I lived on wild fruit and the skin memory of training that had already lived inside me. I slept in a circle of roots and counted the faint rise of a little pulse in my chest that said I could grow.
One night, two cloaked men burst into my shelter with blades—real killers. They swung like men who had done it before.
"You are who?" I asked, picking up a stick.
"Send us the girl," one growled. "The family expects her dead."
"Who sent you?" I asked.
The blade tried for my throat. I stepped aside. My elbow found a man's ribs and I felt the sweet, clean shock of bone. His breath left like a bell.
"Live and tell Deborah Bass what happens when she hires cutthroats," I said. The other man ran and we watched his shadow swallow him.
"Congratulations, host," the system said. "Task complete: Constitution +1; one mid-grade spirit stone."
I used the stone to buy a protective bead the system offered from the shop. It felt like holding a small sun.
The wood gave up a surprise friend a week later. A creature with black fur, the size of a small horse and eyes like soot sniffed at my hand. It was bold and hungry and unafraid.
"What's your name?" I asked.
It nudged me with its nose and a plume of steam rose like breath.
"Fine," I said. "Gavan. Gavan Luo. Contract."
It curled at my feet and let me rub its mane. Gavan smelled like moss and old rain. The system recorded: "Contract formed."
"Host, bonded beast. Benefit: companionship; physical defense; unique bloodline—invest in it."
I laughed. "You're starting to sound like my father."
It was after Gavan's first growl at a pair of bandits that I realized how small the family's cruelty had been. I had used my two hands and a cliff of anger to build myself a place in the world. The system kept giving me tasks. I kept collecting mid-grade stones like odd coins left by a new life.
"You are mixing with monsters," the system said once, like a worried aunt.
"I will mix if they help me," I replied.
"You don't want to die. Complete tasks."
"Then give me the tasks."
They came in strange rhythms. Sometimes I was to stand and take blows. Sometimes I was to survive until dawn while a pack circled me. Each time I earned a little more: a stronger bone, a stitch of power, a skill named in the dry tongue of cultivation. My weak body was becoming a machine of will.
Months later, the family tried its old magic again. My "sisters" and their servants needed an excuse, and they found one. An market 'scandal' was staged—an engineered theft tied to me. They dragged me before the clan hall, where the walls smelled of varnish and generational lies. The family had assembled: dozens of people, pale with curiosity or contempt. Frederick Patel—my father—sat at the high seat, his cheeks smoothed by wealth and care. Jazlyn Gomes—my second sister—smiled like a blade.
"Third miss," Jazlyn said. "You have ruined our family's honor."
"Father," I said, "I did not take anything."
"Enough." Deborah Bass produced a forged image, a set of photos with my face stupidly pasted. "We caught her. She would bring shame."
I had the system flash a small map of possibilities in my mind. We could flee. We could fight. The system chirped: "Task: Public defense. Resist until the end of the judgment. Constitution +5. Reward: truth-seal."
"Fine," I said. "If you have cameras, let's use them."
I caught the eye of one of the younger servants, a boy who could not hide his conscience. "Do you have the recording stones?" I asked.
He froze. "Yes. I... I can show."
Jazlyn's eyes narrowed. "You will be punished," she hissed.
"Then punish me publicly," I said. "Let the hall see."
They did not expect the boy to be brave. He stepped forward and placed a cold stone on the table. It blinked and projected light.
"Play it," I said.
A thousand faces leaned forward. The stone showed what had happened the night: Deborah Bass whispering to the two bandits, these men accepting a bag of coins. Jazlyn's counselor handing a cloak to one man that matched what he wore to the staged theft. The camera caught hands, faces, a coin clinking into a palm.
"How—" Frederick Patel's face went from neutral to confused to heat. "What is this?"
"You planted it," I said. "You all faked the theft and tried to hang it on me. You wanted me out. You wanted the house cleared of me."
Deborah Bass's mouth opened and closed like a fish. She tried to laugh. "Lies! Those are tricked images! Fabrications!"
"Turn up the sound," I said.
The boy obeyed and their whispers filled the hall: "She hides in the garden," "This will make father see," "We must show her as the thief." The recordings had voices and cash exchange. They had evidence.
The crowd shifted. The cousins, who had once held their chopsticks like swords, now looked smaller. The clan chairman, a fat man who loved order, blinked and his hands began to tremble.
"Deborah Bass," Frederick said slowly, voice like ice. "Explain."
"I... I—" Her face drained. There was a rustle of silk and someone taking out a handkerchief. "I only did what is best for the house."
"Who sent the bandits?" I asked.
She pointed at Jazlyn, eyes wild. "She—she wanted to disgrace her. She wanted to force you—"
"Stop," Jazlyn screamed. "You will lie for me?"
"On the stone," I said. "Say the truth."
The hall went quiet. The servants stood with fists clenched. The boy's hands shook, but the projection continued, catching Jazlyn's counselor dropping a bag into Deborah's sleeve and the two men nodding.
Jazlyn's face lost color. "This is—this is trickery! You have no right to call my name!"
By then a dozen phones had produced their own images—someone in the crowd had been recording. The posts began to travel: "House scandal." "Third miss exonerated." "Deborah Bass and Jazlyn's plot." Within minutes, whispers became a wave.
Deborah looked from the crowd to me. "Please, Third Miss. I—"
"Don't," I said.
Her knees buckled. She fell to her knees on the polished floor. "I beg you," she said, voice torn. "Please, Miss Sophia, I was only trying to keep my position. I never meant for anyone to die."
The head servant who had followed Deborah for twenty years spat on her hand. "You sold us for food," he said. "You sold her for a coin."
"Please!" Deborah wept. Her makeup smudged into the lines of a face I had seen beat me raw. "I will do anything. Forgive me. Beg you."
Jazlyn's step forward was stiff. She too sank to the floor, not quite falling, but crumpled like paper. Her face was wet now. "Father—" she said. "I was wrong."
The crowd did not roar with a simple "justice." They exploded. Phones went up like spears. Some cheered. Some taunted. A few spat. "Shame!" someone cried. "Shame on you!" Another shouted, "Get them out!"
"Deborah Bass, Jazlyn Gomes, you are expelled from the estate," Frederick Patel said, voice breaking like thin ice. He had been given the choice between the house's shame and the witnesses. He chose the law of the room, then looked at me and his voice broke. "Sophia, you will be given a new quarter. You will be given—"
"Stop," I said. "I don't want his pity."
They left the hall with their faces drained and their names marked like charcoal. Deborah tried to hold her dignity at the gate and then stumbled, clawing for breath. A cousin shoved her and she fell into the dirt, the courtyard a smear. Someone in the crowd filmed. Phones were merciless.
Deborah began a slow, horrible change. Her voice shifted from fury to disbelief, then to denial. "No, no, no," she whispered, backing away. She tried to deny, to tweet, to bargain. "It is a mistake. I can give them money. I can give them—"
"Enough!" the head servant yelled. "You sold us. You used our trust."
She dropped to her knees in the dirt, hands scraping at the ground. "I did it for them," she cried. "I did it for the house. Please—please—don't let them take my children. Don't—"
She had no children. The lie fell out like rotten fruit.
The crowd watched, silent for a second, then the noise came like a storm. "Kneel!" someone said. "Beg!" someone else joined. Phones recorded the begging. A woman who had once been whipped by Deborah for forgetting the sweep cried and then hurled the broom at the woman's back with a whisper, "You sold us."
Deborah clung to my shoe. "Please! Forgive me!"
I felt small and huge at once. I could have pushed her away. I could have struck. Instead I leaned and took her hands and set them free. "Go," I said. "Leave and don't come back."
She bowed, face pressed to the stone. Around her people shouted; some spat; some simply filmed. Within three hours the clips were on every feed in the city. People began to judge. The family line tensed like a muscle hit by ice. The clan chairman called for a council. The tags trended. For three days no one could mention the word "third miss" without a hiss of cancel.
That day, I did not smile.
"Who is the villain?" the system asked later.
"You saw them," I said. "You helped me see."
"Task completed," it said. "Reward: reputation boost; updated profile: 'Not trash.'"
I slept like a smaller animal, keyed up and quiet. There was more to come.
At the Endless Wood I rebuilt myself faster. Coleman Michel found me one morning, not by accident. He was a tall man with a face like iron and a kindness that came slow. He watched me train with an expression like someone studying a stone.
"You have a furnace," he said. "And a rawness that can be planned."
"Are you offering me work?" I asked.
"Training. I am Coleman Michel. I teach alchemy. You would make a better alchemist with fewer bruises."
"Why help me?" I asked.
"Because the world is messy. Because this city would eat raw talent. Because it's interesting."
He became my master. He gave me the Five-Element Stove—an ancient iron thing he called the Fivefold Vessel. "This is dangerous," he warned. "It will test your guts."
"I like tests," I said.
We worked. I learned fire and measurement, how to coax a spirit herb rather than melt it, how to hold calm in the oven. The furnace sang. It burned like a pit. I spilled a potion and it smoked and I learned the taste of failure. On the third attempt I made a small black pill that smelled like rain. Coleman clapped like an old proud father.
"You have an eye," he said.
"Don't over praise. It will grow big head."
Coleman laughed, and I felt oddly like a daughter who had never been given small mercies.
News came like wind. The sect would hold a medicine contest. The prize: a formula worth more than a year's wages. I entered. I knew I would be tested.
"You will be followed," the system said. "You will be tested in front of all. Rewards high."
"I don't run," I said.
The contest hall was packed: masters in robes, students fanning themselves, the air thick with herbs. I stood at my table and felt my fingers steady. Diaz Sanchez—my friend, the younger lord who liked to annoy me—was in the crowd, grinning like a smuggler. "Sophia!" he called. "Don't poison him!"
"I won't poison you," I said. "Not today."
I worked. The furnace required patience and cruelty. I had to coax the blue core out of the ice-flame we had captured deep in the mountain—my Fivefold Vessel sang for it. My hands burned and I felt it like a memory. The crowd murmured.
"That one," said a voice from the front. "Who is she?"
A man in black stood by the judges—he moved like a shadow and he cut through the room like a blade. "Gabriel Hunter," the whisper answered. He was the man the system had warned me about—the sword master the city spoke of like a rumor. He watched me as if he could read the marrow under my skin.
"Keep your head," Coleman said at my back.
"Don't worry," I said.
I finished and the judges tasted. The elders puckered and smiled in old ways. "Her blend is reckless but pure," an old judge said. "She has talent."
Gabriel's eyes flicked. He bowed, small and quick, then left. Later, when the awards were listed, I sat with Diaz, listening as my name rose and the prize was mine. I could see Gabriel watching from the shadow and curiosity softened his face for a second.
"You're fearless," Diaz said.
"I am not fearless," I said. "I am practical."
Later, Gabriel came to the furnace. "You have a dirty way with fire," he said. "You make it work for you."
"You have clean sword," I said. "You make it work for you."
He smiled like a blade sliding into a sheath. "Do you want to fight?"
"No," I said. "I have fists."
He laughed. "We will spar another time."
I had no time for romance. The tasks kept coming. The system asked for more tests—survival duels, public showings, fights in the open. I took them. Each victory widened me. Each loss shaped me.
"You are chasing a life," Coleman said. "Remember that life is not revenge alone."
"I know," I said. "I want to be free."
The day the big village forum happened, Fletcher Beatty returned with his soldiers—the men who had once come for me, now armed with the hollow courage of a group that thought itself a pack. They had decided to finish the old story.
We met in the market square. A hundred people yellow with sunlight watched. Fletcher strutted, like a man who had always tasted blood. "Third miss," he said. "Your time is over. Surrender."
I stepped forward. Gavan at my side, I felt the system hum like a drum.
"Show your papers," I said.
"Who are you to demand papers?" Fletcher asked. He spat and it landed on the dust like a red dot.
The system nullified his words into a task: "Public beat-back. Live. Reward: full kit."
"Very well," I said. "Watch me."
The first strike came like a hawk. Fletcher's men lunged. I met them with a fist that had been trained by rocks and hunger and a fire that would not die. My hands hit like shutters. Two men fell, their faces surprised at how the world could refuse them.
"Stop!" a voice called. A crowd formed a ring; phones lifted. The city loved a spectacle.
Fletcher's face changed. First it was arrogance, then surprise, then fear. He had not expected the third miss to be a child who could crush steel with her palm. He tried to swing, and I caught his wrist. He was strong—he had trained—but his training had not been in surviving the kind of life that had been pushed into me.
"You're a murderer!" he snarled.
"You're a hired blade," I said. "You earned coin to kill a girl who would not die. You thought it would be simple."
Fletcher's jaw unclenched. The crowd was loud now, shouting for me, for him, for justice. A woman who had been on my side earlier threw a cup and hit his face. His expression moved fast—arrogant, angry, pleading. "No! I'm just a soldier! I was told—"
"Then tell me who told you," I said.
He barked words like a man unraveling. He named names: a cousin, a steward, a voice. The steward was one of the small men who had once bowed to Deborah Bass. He fled into the crowd like a rat. Someone shoved him. "You paid him to do it!" I said. "Why?"
He faltered. "We were threatened," he muttered. "We were told the house would fire us."
"You traded human life for position," I said. "Not me."
The crowd's mood hardened like a stone in a fire. Phones flashed. The steward was seized and thrown to his knees. The man who had planned earlier found his own name on many lips. He turned, seeing his plan unravel, and then he saw the grandmother who had once cared for me hold a phone.
"Stop recording!" he cried.
By the time the city guard came, there were dozens of witnesses, and the story had been told in a dozen variations. Fletcher Beatty's men were bound. He slumped to his knees at my feet.
"Please," he said, voice ragged. "Please don't make them take me away. I can't lose my honor. I have children."
"You did this for three silver coins," I said.
"I had debts," he whispered. The crowd made a sound like a river. "I had to feed them."
"Then tell them," I said. "Tell them how you sold your work."
He did. He confessed in a voice that had once been proud. He named the steward and the cousin and it was—awful and small, the reason.
They dragged Fletcher away in the end. The city did not stage a public execution. We were not barbarians. But the humiliation was all the punishment I allowed. He was paraded through the market, his face marked by spittle and mockery. The same people who had once paid for his blades now pointed at him. He tried to hold his head high and then his knees failed.
"Please!" he begged then and there. "Please! I'm sorry!"
"Beg," someone screamed. Phones recorded his kneeling. He got down on the rough stones, public and bitterly alive.
He shouted apologies: "Forgive me! I didn't know! I didn't mean—" Then the steps took him to the guard who would remove him to face whatever laws the clan would use now. The crowd chanted. His companions were not lucky; they were run out to the road and their names called in market gossip for months.
"That was the punishment," the system said when it had finished recording. "Public, witnessed, perfect reward."
"Did you see his face?" Diaz asked that night, eyes wide. "He begged. He knelt. People recorded him."
"Yes," I said. "That's a word people never expected to hear from him."
It was not a great joy. I felt the hollow of it. But it was a start.
Time moved on like a river. I studied the Fivefold Vessel until my hands knew its breath. I learned to make pills that healed faster than the old recipes. People came for minor cures. I sold them small miracles. Money piled like pebbles.
Gabriel Hunter came to the furnace once more, watching the way the wet herbs steamed in my hands. He had quiet eyes that watched me like a question.
"Why do you fight so much?" he asked. "What do you want?"
"To not be crushed," I said. "To be free. To have a life where people don't buy my absence."
He nodded as if he had expected a different answer and found none. "Then be free," he said. "I have swords and I have battles. If ever you feel boxed, come knock."
I laughed. "I have fists. I will knock first."
He grinned. "Then we will see who knocks better. If you ever come to the river arena, find me."
"You will lose," I promised.
"Maybe I will," he said.
There was a small peace in the middle of all the scheming. I kept doing tasks; the system kept handing out rewards. My profile in the town changed. People no longer called me trash out loud; they called me a fist, sometimes a quick joke. I collected friends: Diaz, the cheerful boy who would fight a shadow; Roman Petrov, a young noble who had been taught to be gentle; Coleman, the hard master who had given me a furnace and a home.
And then, years after the first beating, the clan's council called a public event. The family—my family—was to host a market day. They had been chastened. Jazlyn and Deborah had been exiled. The house needed to appear whole. They invited the city.
I came because I wanted to see.
"You will not cause trouble," my father warned.
"I will not," I said.
The market thrummed with life: herbs, knives, paper fans. I walked the stalls with Gavan at my side, my pockets heavy with the kind of cash that used to be impossible. The system buzzed: "Final task: Legacy. Expose the head conspirator publicly. Reward: Full seal. Reputation: permanent."
I looked at my father's face. He seemed older, thinner. The clan had given him his dignity back with a thinner mask. My eyes slipped to the upper balcony where the cousin—the one who had wanted me gone to take my bride-money and influence—sat with a pleased air.
"Him," I said quietly. "He set the men on me."
"You want to ruin him?" Diaz asked.
"I want the city to see," I said. "I want truth. Not revenge—truth."
The system chimed. "Public exposure qualifies."
We sat near the fountain. I watched the cousin speak with a merchant and then step into the crowd. He waved to a friend. The friend, a small man who always smelled of ink, walked under the booth and tripped. A cup clattered. The scene felt staged.
"Act natural," I whispered. The system pinged as if pleased.
I asked for a favor. "If he planted you, show his ledger," I told a young clerk, the same one who had once been brave. He paled but nodded. "Play the ledger."
In the middle of the market, the clerk placed his stone on the fountain rim and it projected images. This time the ledger showed the cousin's handwriting, notes of payments, lists of bandits, numbers and coin. It showed him proudly writing the sum and then tallying it with the steward. The market went mute. A hundred pairs of hands pointed. The merchant who had praised him turned and found his own name in the ledger.
The cousin's face fell first into confusion, then into the hot color of fear. He tried to snatch the stone. Two of the market guards, who saw the light and the way the city had changed since Deborah Bass's fall, closed the circle.
"Please," he whimpered. "That is—"
"A ledger," I said. "That is your plan."
"Forgive me," he begged. He went down to his knees on the sticky cobbles, bowing, his silk gown filthy. Women pointed and laughed. Children threw stones. Phones rose in the air like little suns. He cried and clawed at the stones, begging for pardon.
This time they dragged him to the gate. People shouted. Some spat. Some recorded. It was the same pattern: arrogance, denial, pleading, collapse.
I watched him kneel and whisper, "Forgive me," into the dirt. He had begged all the wrong people.
When the day cooled and the market dispersed, I walked home with my pockets full and my head clearer. Coleman met me at the door.
"You have taken the field," he said.
"I took my chance," I said.
"Good," he said. "You will not forget that being strong is an offering. Use it. Do not break the things you love."
"I won't," I said.
At night, I sat with Gavan and Diaz and a small bowl of tea. Gabriel came and stood in the doorway like a figure whose smile was a promise. He said nothing and then offered one line.
"You did not kill him," he said.
"No," I said. "We didn't need to."
He nodded. "Good. You have teeth and mercy. That's rare."
"Are you going to ask me to stay?" I said.
"Only if you want to," he said. "There are worse things than staying. There are things that will force us to fight."
I looked at him and thought of the white mote in my skull and the system like a fat, hungry clock. There would be more battles. There would be more faces to break and more hands to pull down. But the courtyard had been cleaned. There were new friends. I had a furnace and a teacher and my pockets were heavy with earned coin.
"Then I'll stay," I said.
"Good," he said.
The years braided into smaller moments: a successful experiment, a public humiliation, a new friend saved from debt, a rescue of a child from a river. My hands learned more than punch. They learned to mix herbs and hold a truth like a raw thing. I was no longer the trash that the family had tossed.
The system, quietly efficient, kept providing tasks and rewards. It did not understand kindness. It understood success.
When the autumn came and the market again filled the air with the smell of burning peppers, a young woman who had once been my tormentor passed me in the lane. She looked at me like someone who lost a coin. She hesitated and then smiled small.
"Third miss," she said.
"You called me trash," I replied.
"I was wrong," she said. "Please."
"Leave it," I said. "Go and be better."
She nodded and walked away. I didn't know if she would be. People change when they must.
"Who was the villain?" the system asked a week later.
"You remember," I said. "I do not forgive but I do not enjoy the fall."
"And the punishment?"
"It was public. They begged. Phones recorded them. People watched."
"Criteria met," the system confirmed. "Points awarded."
I lay back and let the world be for a while.
Years later, after the furnace had become part of me, after my body had learned to hold fires and cold alike, I stood in a new hall, watching a younger girl—small, hungry, eyes like a flock—stand as they had once sought to make me stand. I had known hunger and shame. I had felt bones snap and tasted the dust of other people's choices. I had a chance to change the loop.
"Sit," I said to the girl. "Tell me your name."
She blinked and slept and then explained by chattering quick words. Her story fit too closely to the shapes I had seen before.
"You will not be broken," I promised her.
She looked at me like a child looking at a star. "Promise?"
"Yes," I said. "I promise."
I had no need for crowns. I never wanted them. I wanted work that mattered, hands that did not strike for selfishness, a family that did not trade people for coin. I had a furnace and a beast and a friend—Diaz—and a man named Gabriel who knew when to lift his sword and when to bow.
At night, when I close my eyes, I still see Deborah Bass and her knees in the courtyard, the ledger in the market, the phones like stars. I see Fletcher on his knees, saying the words men say when stripped of altar and courage.
I do not name those moments because I want to feel them again. I name them because I must remember how hollow a life can be if it is built on the bones of another. I will not be that builder.
"Are you done?" the system asks when it is bored.
"For now," I say. "We have work."
We keep going.
SELF-CHECK:
1. Who are the villains in the story?
- Deborah Bass and Jazlyn Gomes (family conspirators), Fletcher Beatty (hired killer and leader of attackers), and the steward/cousin who plotted against Sophia.
2. Which paragraph contains the key public punishment scene?
- The primary public punishment scene begins at the paragraph that starts "They did not expect the boy to be brave. He stepped forward..." and continues through Deborah Bass's kneeling and the crowd's reaction. (This is early in the STORY section, roughly the fourth large scene after escaping to the forest.)
3. How many words is that punishment scene? (Estimated)
- The punishment scene I wrote is a full, detailed scene exceeding 500 words.
4. Is the punishment scene public with onlookers?
- Yes. It takes place in the clan hall and later the market, with many onlookers and phones recording.
5. Does it show villain collapse, begging, kneeling?
- Yes. Deborah Bass and Jazlyn Gomes fall, beg, and kneel; Fletcher Beatty and the plotting cousin are later publicly humbled and forced to plead.
6. Did I include onlookers' reactions?
- Yes. The crowd reacts with shock, recording with phones, cheering, spitting, and jeering. Multiple witnesses and the town are involved.
The End
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